joannqn Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 (edited) I gave my 10 year old an assignment to write a poem using apostrophe. DH and I love it. She doesn't think it is good. What says the hive? O, Cardboard Box O, cardboard box, how glorious thou be, With thy open-up sides all brown and dusty. O, thou gave me space for storage and decor. But now, cardboard box, I must sadly say, That thou is not large enough to hold all my stuff. I throw thee out the door for that poor recycling truck. Edited April 8, 2010 by joannqn Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cedarmom Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 :lol: Love it! Very funny! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pink Fairy Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 She's only 10?! I think it's a great poem. :hurray: She must have an awesome teacher! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mom2denj Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 She is only 10?? She did a wonderful job!!!:hurray: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Carrie12345 Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 :lol: Love it!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mrsrevmeg Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 That's great!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chris in VA Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 (edited) Did you mean hyperbole? :D ETA: AH,thanks for instructing me! Edited April 8, 2010 by Chris in VA Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fivetails Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 Cute! :D [but I think I'm missing something.. I don't see an apostrophe?] Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KJsMom Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 I think it is great. If she doesn't like it heaping praise on won't help unless that is what she is why she says she doesn't like it. ;) Maybe if you offer her the opportunity to make changes she will feel better about it? Either way I think it is ok for kids not to like something they have done. I make sure my dd knows I love it, but I think it is ok if she doesn't. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
joannqn Posted April 8, 2010 Author Share Posted April 8, 2010 Apostrophe: A figure of speech in which some absent or nonexistent person or thing is addressed as if present and capable of understanding. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
joannqn Posted April 8, 2010 Author Share Posted April 8, 2010 I think it is great. If she doesn't like it heaping praise on won't help unless that is what she is why she says she doesn't like it. ;) Maybe if you offer her the opportunity to make changes she will feel better about it? Either way I think it is ok for kids not to like something they have done. I make sure my dd knows I love it, but I think it is ok if she doesn't. Hmmm...I would have never thought to respond like this. You sound like a good friend of mine, the one I always go to for advice for handling people situations. Wanna be good friend number 2? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dawn in OH Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 I think it's great! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KJsMom Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 Hmmm...I would have never thought to respond like this. You sound like a good friend of mine, the one I always go to for advice for handling people situations. Wanna be good friend number 2? LOL! I certainly don't consider myself an expert in handling people situations. I'm actually a little awkward in person, much better in print! :D Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LibraryLover Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 LOL! :) I hardly ever like anything I write, at least at first. Some of us are just Like That. It's ok. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EarleneW Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 She did great! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i.love.lucy Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 I love it! :D Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SproutMamaK Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 Apostrophe: A figure of speech in which some absent or nonexistent person or thing is addressed as if present and capable of understanding. Wow, I've always known it as prosopopeia. I has no idea there was another meaning for apostrophe! I'm not surprised that there are two meanings for one word, but I AM surprised that they're both literary. It's a great poem, you should be proud. You should be even prouder that she thinks she can do better and wants to live up to what she feels she can accomplish! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
joannqn Posted April 8, 2010 Author Share Posted April 8, 2010 Wow, I've always known it as prosopopeia. I has no idea there was another meaning for apostrophe! I'm not surprised that there are two meanings for one word, but I AM surprised that they're both literary. In prosopopeia the absent thing is doing the speaking. In apostrophe, you are speaking to the absent person or thing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Julie in MO Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 you can throw around! No wonder the girl can write poetry! :lol: Blessings, Julie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jenn- Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 I think it is very good. That said I laughed at it (cause it is funny) and my daughter would have gotten upset because I laughed. Maybe she wasn't going for funny. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mrs Mungo Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 I gave my 10 year old an assignment to write a poem using apostrophe. DH and I love it. She doesn't think it is good. What says the hive? O, Cardboard Box O, cardboard box, how glorious thou be, With thy open-up sides all brown and dusty. O, thou gave me space for storage and decor. But now, cardboard box, I must sadly say, That thou is not large enough to hold all my stuff. I throw thee out the door for that poor recycling truck. I love it!! My kids liked it too. My eldest particularly liked it, she loves organizing...and boxes! :D Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KristenS Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 I'd let her tweak ... it is her poem, after all, no matter how great everyone else likes it. (I like it, and I was also glad to learn the other meaning of apostrophe.) I do see that in the next to last line, after 'thou' the verb should be something like 'art', not 'is'. Maybe her inner poet's ear is giving her clues like that, that she just can't pinpoint, so she thinks the whole thing is bad. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
joannqn Posted April 8, 2010 Author Share Posted April 8, 2010 you can throw around! No wonder the girl can write poetry! :lol: Blessings, Julie Well, that's just an illusion. I know apostrophe because we just covered it in our MTC poetry book. I know the other because I looked it up. I'd let her tweak ... it is her poem, after all, no matter how great everyone else likes it. (I like it, and I was also glad to learn the other meaning of apostrophe.) I do see that in the next to last line, after 'thou' the verb should be something like 'art', not 'is'. Maybe her inner poet's ear is giving her clues like that, that she just can't pinpoint, so she thinks the whole thing is bad. Thanks, she was having trouble (and I was having trouble helping her) with the old English. I think her biggest problem with it is that it doesn't rhyme. I just discovered rhyme dictionaries online so she's going to edit it with the help of one of them. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snickerdoodle Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 I love it! Well done! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snickerdoodle Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 I almost started singing it to the tune of "Oh Christmas tree" Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
joannqn Posted April 8, 2010 Author Share Posted April 8, 2010 I almost started singing it to the tune of "Oh Christmas tree" :lol: Ok, you got singing and then my daughter did this :leaving: You all have renewed her interest in the poem. She wants to work on it some more and get it to rhyme. Thanks! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snickerdoodle Posted April 8, 2010 Share Posted April 8, 2010 :lol: Ok, you got singing and then my daughter did this :leaving: My kids are now singing various renditions of "O, Cardboard Box" Thank you Joann's daughter (I'm sorry I don't know your name.) !!! :D:D Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mommyof4ks Posted April 9, 2010 Share Posted April 9, 2010 :lol: Love it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MamaSheep Posted April 9, 2010 Share Posted April 9, 2010 I think it's wonderful! The only thing I see wrong with it at all is the "thou is", which should be "thou are" or more formally "thou art". You'd say "you are", not "you is". It's the same structure. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
joannqn Posted April 9, 2010 Author Share Posted April 9, 2010 (edited) Thanks to your suggestions, she's corrected the old english grammar and edited more to her liking...which is rhyming. Here's the new version: O, cardboard box, how glorious thou art, With thy sides all dusty and falling apart. O thou gave me space for storage and décor. But now, cardboard box, thou can help me no more, For thou art not large enough, oh, tough luck! I throw thee out the door for that poor recycling truck. Edited April 9, 2010 by joannqn Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snickerdoodle Posted April 9, 2010 Share Posted April 9, 2010 O, cardboard box, how glorious thou art, With thou sides all dusty and falling apart. O thou gave me space for storage and décor. But now, cardboard box, you can help me no more, For thou art not large enough, oh, tough luck! I throw thee out the door for that poor recycling truck. LOVE IT! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JessaMae Posted April 9, 2010 Share Posted April 9, 2010 Fantastic! From reading the poem, I think our 10 yro dds would get along fabulously! :001_smile: They seem to think alike. :001_smile: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KristenS Posted April 9, 2010 Share Posted April 9, 2010 Even better! Cool! (If she WANTS feedback, she can change the 'you' to a 'thou' for consistency, and then it would be 'thou canst', and 'thy sides' rather than 'thou sides'. Possibly 'gavest' rather than 'gave'. Not that she has to change it. Just if she wants to. The rhyming certainly adds another layer of charm to it. She's definitely got a knack for this sort of thing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KJsMom Posted April 9, 2010 Share Posted April 9, 2010 I love it. How does your dd feel about it this time? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Halftime Hope Posted April 10, 2010 Share Posted April 10, 2010 Even better! Cool! (If she WANTS feedback, she can change the 'you' to a 'thou' for consistency, and then it would be 'thou canst', and 'thy sides' rather than 'thou sides'. Possibly 'gavest' rather than 'gave'. Not that she has to change it. Just if she wants to. The rhyming certainly adds another layer of charm to it. She's definitely got a knack for this sort of thing. What she said! :iagree:on both the old english conjugations and on the knack for poetry! :iagree: Have you taught her the word "wordsmith" yet? :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MamaSheep Posted April 10, 2010 Share Posted April 10, 2010 Thanks to your suggestions, she's corrected the old english grammar and edited more to her liking...which is rhyming. Here's the new version: O, cardboard box, how glorious thou art, With thy sides all dusty and falling apart. O thou gave me space for storage and décor. But now, cardboard box, thou can help me no more, For thou art not large enough, oh, tough luck! I throw thee out the door for that poor recycling truck. I love it! Well done. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KristenS Posted April 10, 2010 Share Posted April 10, 2010 So cool! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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