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This is the only run-on sentence I noticed. I would just suggest replacing the comma after "day" with a period, and capitalizing the word "shade". Then it's two sentences. He may be meaning to make it a series ("x, y, and z"), but it does seem awkward, as the items in the series aren't obviously related in some manner.
I'll bet if you point out all the vivid imagery he used, the minor splitting of that one run-on into two sentences would not be a big deal. At least, I know my reluctant writer son would be ok with that suggestion. We've had to move his "which" clauses around in both paragraphs he's written so far (he's in lesson 1 of SWI-A). He had an appropriate "which" clause, but he put it in the wrong place in the sentence both times. So I said, "That's a great use of the 'which' clause! Let's just move the clause to right after the noun it describes. I really like how you used it in THIS sentence though - good thinking!" So it's sandwiched between compliments. Even as a perfectionist, he's been ok with that. :D
The only other thing I noticed about your son's sentences is that sometimes he used commas where they weren't needed. The sentences didn't look like run-ons to me though. I think he did a great job. :) If you have talked about commas a lot in your grammar program, you could maybe have him do a scavenger hunt for extraneous commas in the paper. If you haven't hit it much yet, I'd probably just leave it alone for now and make a note to yourself to study comma usage in grammar.
Thank you. Those are good suggestions. I also thought that the first sentence sounded awkward and it should be two. I also thought there were too many commas.
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WOW! Thanks for all the FAB ideas!
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I don't know how some people do it. They seem to be able to burn the candle at both ends and still stay wonderfully cheerful. Perhaps they've found some wonderful drug that I don't know about :glare:.
I haven't slept for more than a few hours in a row for the last month and although I try to catch a few zzz's here and there, I am getting waaayyy too overtired. My poor kids are starting to feel the brunt of it. Mommy tends to be a little overly touchy (my niece calls it itchy) when she is getting really over tired.
I don't really need any advice, just needed to whine for a little bit. Sorry for taking up anyone's time.
I've been there. It SUCKS!!! :grouphug::grouphug:
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Any quick make ahead breakfast ideas? I'd really like to get my mornings started earlier and maybe even exercise in the morning. My problem is that I'm never hungry in the a.m. but if I don't eat I have no energy to exercise. I thought if I had a quick, make ahead breakfast ..... but what??
Recipes would be great, too! Thanks!
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I've been looking at Zumba and Just Dance for Kinect.
Is it possible to lose weight with exercise-type video games?
When the weather is nice I like to walk/run outside, but during bad weather I usually don't exercise.
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:iagree: I can't find any run-ons, either. I think he did an excellent job. I would just work on the missing commas this time around. If he is reluctant writer, he probably needs to hear what a great job he did, and it wouldn't be an exaggeration.
Thank you! I've just let writing slide for such a long time with him and I've been really worried about preparing him for college writing.
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The least amount of criticism? How about, "Great Job!"
When I read that your son is a reluctant writer I was totally unprepared for the passage that followed. I would have never guessed that he is a reluctant writer.
Did he really just start IEW a few weeks ago? He's either picking up the dress-ups naturally, or he has a natural gift for words.
I'm not seeing the run-on sentences. He has many long sentences with great description, but they are not run-ons simply because they are long.
Of course there is room for improvement in this short story: minor tweaks in wording or punctuation, adding details here and there, etc. But nothing major.
Is his informative writing more stilted than his story writing? Is that why you say he is a reluctant writer?
That was lesson #7 - Story Sequence, characters, conflict and climax. He was never able to do WWE or Writing Strands so I put off making him write until we started IEW a few weeks ago. He reads A LOT and has a fantastic vocabulary but hasn't been able to form cohesive paragraphs, let alone write a full paper. I have the feeling he will do much better at story writing than informative writing.
I have to sit with him during the SWI and stop the video often to make sure he understands. It's been a slooooow process. Thank you for your input! I'm very used to his vivid descriptions so I think I was looking at structure more than style.
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my son? He is 13 and a very reluctant writer. We just started IEW a few weeks ago and this is one assignments. I think it's full of run on sentences but I don't want to discourage him. Please, if you have the time, take a look and help me help my ds edit this paper. Thanks!
The Sake Merchant and the Samurai
It was a cool but cloudless day, shade cast by the falling cherry blossoms dappled the ground, and under a tree sat a Samurai, wounded at the battle of Sekigahara. A Sake merchant saw the wounded Samurai, and carefully tended his wounds. The Sake merchant was a native of Owari Province, at the time ruled by the benevolent but iron fisted Oda Nobunaga.
Less than a year afterwards, the Sake merchant borrowed three-hundred thousand moon from the local gang, but could not pay them back! A week later, the leader of the gang, Shishido Baiken, became impatient with the Sake merchant, and violently sheared off his hand! The Sake merchant, fearing for his life, hastily made for the city, hoping to hire a "Yojimbo" or bodyguard.
When the Sake merchant finally arrived at the city of Kiyosu, he realized with a start that he hardly had enough money to feed himself, let alone hire a Yojimbo. Depressed, he collapsed in the street, and, thus making a spectacle of himself, was noticed by Shishido Baiken and his gang. But just as they were about to kill him, the Samurai that he had saved earlier recognized the Sake merchant, and lunged at Baiken, killing him in a single stroke! The rest of the gang, having witnessed their leader be killed so easily, fled in terror. And so, by his kindness to the Samurai the Sake merchant was saved.
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Really??? The drama and emotional outbursts (and lingering emotions that just won't go away!) from my daughter are unbelievable! The boys are much more quick to let things roll off their backs. Granted, they haven't hit puberty yet, but I can't imagine girls in puberty would be worse than boys! How are the girls easier?
Maybe I'm just used to girls and know how to handle them. It's rough, but I know what to expect and what to do. And I think my ds is just very difficult. There are times when I just don't like him very much. I always love him, but "liking" is a totally different thing.
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I have 5 girls, 29, 27, 23, 21 and 9. I also have one 13 yo boy. All I can say is that I MUCH prefer daughters. :D
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My 6 year old has an ipad. She takes good care of it. Why do you care how much money someone makes and what they buy?
Normally I don't care and it's not my business. I guess it's just my SIL. I think the iPod thing was just the final straw for me. She completely neglects this little boy. He failed 1st grade partly because he probably has ADHD and she won't follow through with testing and she has never helped him with his homework and doesn't even know when the bus picks him up. He's been kicked off the bus several times this year. She NEVER cooks for him. She works as a waitress 7 days a week so she doesn't have to be around him too much (she's admitted to it). She decided to have a sleepover birthday party for him, came home from work that day and fell asleep and went back to work at 6 a.m. the next morning. Her dh, who isn't the father, had to take care of all the little boys at the party.
She's got a lot of problems and she won't do anything about them and because of this her son is suffering. I've tried to help but it's a very very complicated situation that would take too long to explain. You wouldn't really want to know anyways ;)
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I doubt that I would have, if they'd been available when my kids were that age. But my kids weren't super careful, and we were too cheap to buy something like that.
My kids have them now and they are great.
But why does it irk you? Does your SIL ask for financial help from you?
Yes, she does and I also send food over.
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A 7 year old boy who has broken 4 Nintendo DS's! This is my SIL who waitresses 7 days a week so she doesn't have to take care of her child. They live in squalor and she's too cheap to pay $17/month for trash service. My dh comes from a really weird family, but this just blew my mind.
We make 5x what they make and would never buy an iPod Touch for a 7yo and our dc take excellent care of ALL their things. This just really irks me.
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I went ahead and bought my core D & E instructor guides last night. I guess we are done with Sonlight at this point.
I have to admit that I feel really sad. I remember reading my Sonlight catalog in the evenings when my oldest was just a toddler. It played a huge role in being able to envision myself as a homeschooler. I always knew I wouldn't be buying full cores from them once we got to core F, but I had imagined myself continuing to buy from them for the next decade or so.
I have nothing useful to add to the Sonlight discussion. I just feel sad tonight. That is all.
I used SL back when I hs-ed my now 21 and 23 year old dd's and I bought it again for my 13 yo ds when he was 6-10. I loved box day and looking through all the books. We have many great SL memories. :grouphug: But, after all the bologna that's gone on with them this year it just left a very bad taste in my mouth. I won't buy from SL anymore. I bought Memoria Press's 4th grade for my dd and I really really love MP and am very pleased with their new curriculum packages ..... but box day wasn't the same. :sad:
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So my plan for this year is to use: A Child's Geography by Ann Voskamp, Hilyer's CHOW, Apologia Swimming Creatures and Galloping the Globe. We'll continue using R&S for grammar and spelling, Abeka for math, and Pentime for handwriting.
I was just looking at Pentime but couldn't find any samples. How do you like it?
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Oh good. Sorry I misunderstood the joke :001_smile:
Bill
I guess it wasn't really funny. I DO care about honeybees, but I sure would like to take a flamethrower to those darn beetles! I wouldn't have roses anymore but I wouldn't have beetles either :001_smile:
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The least toxic way to get rid of them is to get them while they are still in the soil as grubs. Things like Bacillus Thuringiensis is a safe, naturally occuring bacteria that you can apply to your lawn. The problem is your neighbors also have to do it too or their beetles are just going to fly on over and then you are back to picking. Here is a link to some info: http://insects.about.com/od/insectpests/a/control-japanese-beetles.htm
I'm off to figure out how to keep the deer from eating my beautiful hosta. I think they have found the "salad bar" in my front yard. The only solution to this problem that I see is to keep the dog staked out their all night but I don't think my neighbors are going to appreciate it. I don't think the dog will either.:lol:
I thought about using that bacteria, but our entire neighborhood uses chemicals and I doubt they think twice about it, especially the people on the golf course side. I've never seen such anti-"green" people.
I thought chipmunks ate grubs and we've got dozens of them. I've never been able to plant sunflowers because the chipmunks eat the seeds EVERY darn year I plant them!
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It is heartbreaking to hear. This kind of spraying kills all the beneficial insects in your yard and theirs. Any sort of natural ecosystem you had going is now disrupted. And that really isn't good.
The risk of wiping out a colony of honey bees (who take Sevin back to their hives) is too high. And, it doesn't do any good.
At this stage of life you may kill a few for a few days (something one can do knocking them into soapy water in the morning non-toxically) but you have not solved anything. You've got a Pyrrhic victory.
As penance read Rachel Carsons's Silent Spring.
Bill
GEEZ, I said I was kidding .... "J/K" just kidding:chillpill: the bugs are safe. ALL the bugs are safe. I swear.
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Spaying Sevin is an absolutely reckless act. It is highly toxic to honey bees (which are attracted to flowers like roses) and can kill whole hives. And it is just not a solution to eliminating Japanese beetles.
Don't do it! Please.
Bill
Too late. I sprayed the ENTIRE yard and got my neighbors to spray theirs also.
J/K
I've been trying to catch them in the act so I can pick them off, but I haven't found a single one. I'm still searching for a solution.
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I've been trying to figure out how to cram 3 years of Memoria Press into about 1 year or so. I asked over at MP but their forum doesn't get nearly the traffic this one gets.
I want to cherry pick from Classical Studies, Christian Studies and Literature. It doesn't seem feasible to do FMOG AND the Dorothy Mills Ancient Greeks study. How do I choose and how do I know how much time to allow for each thing?
I'm considering the Famous Men studies, the Dorothy Mills studies, the Trojan War, The Illiad and Odyssey, and I'm sure I'm leaving something out. If you are familiar with MP please feel free to post suggestions.
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I am probably going to be doing something similar. I've been going back and forth the last few months on whether to leave HoD after using it three years. The Circe thread started me re-thinking my philosophy in March, and now it looks like I may be short on money and time this year, both of which you need to do HoD in full! :D
I want to focus on math (continuing with Singapore), LA (new choices for us), and classic lit (going off on our own; I wish I could afford TTC right now). I'm thinking of block scheduling history and science. We will probably get the spines from HoD's Rev2Rev, so we'll still be on the cycle, but no schedule and no notebooking.
It's not set in stone yet, but that's the way I'm leaning.
Also adding in a K-er! That will be a new dynamic.
After reading LCC, I decided HOD is not the direction I want to go. I sold CTC for the second and FINAL time and I bought MP's 4th grade package. I'm loving what I see!
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You can pick them by hand and drop them into a bucket of soapy water. Very safe and environmentally friendly.
You can try Captain Jack's dead bug which is a biological control. Supposed to be safer. However, I had little luck with it. When I used it to kill the beetles on my peach trees, I still had no peaches.
So I did something totally inorganic and awful. I sprayed everything with liquid Sevin. I had peaches this year for the first time in 5 years.
Is is wrong to hum cheerfully while spraying Japanese Beetles? nothing wrong at all!
I think I may go for the liquid Sevin.
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Chickens and guinea hens love Japanese beetles.
Think someone would let me borrow some for a few days? I'd love to own them but our zoning won't allow it.
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what the heck do I get rid of those pesky beetles with? My knock-out roses are beautiful but the beetles are devouring all the leaves.
Any ideas?
what new "thing" are you most excited about for this fall?
in K-8 Curriculum Board
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MP 4th Grade package!
especially First Form Latin and MP science!
I'm nervous, also!