LMD Posted February 20, 2012 Share Posted February 20, 2012 What do you think? Any suggestions, improvements, things to work on? My DD started 2nd grade this january, we did WWE1 last year, this year we're doing Classical Writing Primers and LLATL yellow. In this lesson she learned what a paragraph was, this is her first real attempt at a paragraph - prompted from her LLATL exercise. 1st draft: My horse will be named Rosey. She will be brown maned and will be white. Run, run, run. I would be kind. We discussed which sentences could be improved, she came up with and typed out the improvements. 2nd draft: My horse will be named Rosey. Her mane and tail will be brown, the rest of her body, except the hooves, will be white. Run, run, run! Rosey goes over the mountains. I would be kind to her. :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stina2000 Posted August 8, 2012 Share Posted August 8, 2012 I think it looks great. She covered lots of ideas and had nice descriptions. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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