acurtis75 Posted January 20, 2012 Share Posted January 20, 2012 This is what dd came up with today for her narration. I'm looking for some feedback and suggestions to help her improve. The Mongols were a tribe of wild men that fought each other a lot. Ghengis Khan of the Yakka tribe decided to unite all the Mongol tribes to conquer Bejie China. The now united Mongols conquered Bejie. She wanted to look up how to spell Bejing but we were in a hurry because company arrived so I just told her how to spell it and she misunderstood. She spelled everything else correctly on her own. I also think "tribe" after Yakka should be capitalized and told her she needed a comma in between Bejing & China. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legomom Posted January 22, 2012 Share Posted January 22, 2012 I think this sounds good. I would definitely have been satisfied with this from my kids. I am especially impressed with the correct spelling! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
slavila Posted January 25, 2012 Share Posted January 25, 2012 I think it looks great. I'd be satisfied with that work. We just completed that week as well. This is what my 9yo ds wrote, Genghis Khan wanted the tribes to join together and conquer Beijing. He wanted the bags full of gold, soft beds, warm houses, and food. I told him how to spell Genghis Khan and Beijing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mommamia Posted January 26, 2012 Share Posted January 26, 2012 (edited) Never mind....answered my own question ;) Edited January 26, 2012 by mom2littleboys Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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