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Hi,
I'm trying to improve the quality of my paper and I was wondering if anyone has any constructive criticism? I would really appreciate it! :laugh:
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Hi I'm a tenth grader doing my first argumentative paper and I would really appreciate some feedback. Writing is not my strong point! :001_smile:
Topic: Do violent video games effect teens to act in a violent way?
Thesis: A teenager playing a violent video game will be influenced to act violently.
Most people don’t think a violent video game has a big impact on
teenagers. The question is why wouldn’t a mindless killing game influence a
teen? If you watch a gourmet cooking show it makes you hungry. If you
watch a sad movie you might feel depressed or saddened afterward. If you
can be influenced by something as simple as a movie or TV show, a
teenager playing a violent video game will be influenced to act violently.
First, violent video games can cause them to act violently within their
family. According to the website Clean Cut Media, a sixteen year old boy
named Daniel Petric shot and killed his mother and wounded his father
because they would not let him play Halo 3. He faces up to twenty three
years to life in prison.
Next, violent video games can cause teens to act violently in school. Its
been twelve year since the Columbine school shooting when two teen boy
committed a horrific crime. They shot and killed twelve of their peers, one
teacher, wounded numerous others, and then killed themselves. They both
suffered from depression and other issues but USA TODAY states that
according to their parents and friends, they would play violent computer
games for hours upon hours.
Finally, these violent video games can cause teens to act violently in
society. A tragic example is the story of eighteen year old Devin Moore as
told by a 60 minute report. He was brought to the police station by Officer
Arnold Strickland who suspected Devin of stealing a car. Devin then
grabbed the officers gun and shot him multiple times. Just then, Officer
James Crump heard these gunshots and went to investigate, Devin then
shot him three times. Then before leaving he shot a 911 dispatcher named
Ace Mealer, stole a police car and drove away. What makes this story
even worse is the fact that Devin had already done this before, just not in
real life. Grand Theft Auto had allowed Devin to shoot police officers and
steal their cars, just as he had done to these three innocent men.
It’s clear to see these violent video games are influencing teens to act in
irrational, violent ways. There are many more stories of young people
murdering there family, friends, and innocent bystanders. Sadly the
majority of the time the teens are under the influence of these violent
games. The death of the people mentioned above might never have
happened if the teens with them had not been exposed to the violence of
these video games. It’s time to change what kind of video games our teens
are playing, and that change could start with you.
Thank you for taking the time to read this!
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You might check the toy clearance aisles at local discount stores right now. I recently stumbled upon a sale that allowed me purchase new toys for garage sale prices. I could not believe that they were clearancing toys for 50-85% off, but they wanted to make room for the newer stuff. I am basically done with Christmas shopping for my children, and I stocked up on birthday gifts, as well!
I second this idea. You can get some great, great deals in the clearance aisles right now.
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I haven't been on these forums in quite some time and I just popped on tonight and saw the title of your post and said to myself "holy moly I could have written that!"
Your post describes "exactly" what I am going through with my soon to be 9th grade dd...
I have no answers for you as I'm still trying to figure it out myself...but I have tons and tons of sympathy for you!! It is not easy that's for sure.
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This is what I did for Saxon 3. In a Word document I made a table with two columns. Then, I just put the # of the problem in the first column and then typed the question out in the second column. I did it for a few months of questions and then printed out the sheet. My kids would do the appropriate question for the day and then highlight it to show that it was finished.
I had to draw a table on the back of the sheet for one or two of the questions but that's it. I did this two years ago and reused it last year with my ds. It takes very little effort and time to do and would be very easy to do with Saxon 2.
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Have you tried putting her in pull ups? This might alleviate her fear of wetting herself. She can pull them down and check if they are wet. If they are, she can change them. If they're not, she can leave them on.
My ds who is 9 went through a bed wetting phase. He was fine until he was about 7 or 8 and then he just started having accidents a few nights a week. It was very frustrating. After trying everything else, I finally put him in pull ups and it was like a weight lifted off his shoulders. He didn't have to worry about it anymore. He still had accidents but they became fewer. Now he doesn't need them any more although he still has the occasional accident.
My sympathies are with you. The irrational behavior of our kids can be one of the toughest things to deal with at times. Hang in there...this too shall pass! :)
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I loved the idea of this book -the love story and the way he traveled through time but I hated some of the situations the author put in and I especially hated some of the language. It seemed so unnecessary. I couldn't finish it.
I seem to be in the minority in my dislike of this book but to each his own.
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Our local news stations have "help me" segments. Viewers can contact the station, explain the problem they couldn't solve and if they think it makes a good story, they will try to resolve it for you. Maybe your stations have something similar.
As others have said, your local newspaper may be able to help.
I would also contact your local politicians - higher then the city council. Find out who your state legislator is and contact them with the issue as well.
Before any of these, I would give the library manager an opportunity to do the right thing. If she doesn't, well....
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I would consider digging a little deeper with your dd about "why" she wants to go strapless. What look is she hoping for? Does she think that this will help her to look cool or pretty or popular? Once you have answers to these then I think it would be easier for you to address why this wouldn't be appropriate attire for her.
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Let me say right at the start that I'm very, very pro breastfeeding. I nursed all three of my children but by my choice, only to a year old. I loved it.
Having said that, while I was watching that video, all three of my dc's wandered over to see what I was watching. Here are their comments:
That it was weird, awkward, disturbing, disgusting and a little bit gross. :tongue_smilie:
I tend to agree with all their opinions. Especially the part where they named them...Ewww!
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This was a really long post but it was worth the read. There are a lot of nuggets of wisdom throughout it!
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts as I've been struggling with just this issue (independent work) with my 12 yo and it has put some things in perspective for me.
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Does this really surprise anyone? No one is bothering to *fix* the problems - all the gov't does is throw more & more money into it but the people who got them into the mess in the first place are left in their jobs.
More money = more opportunity to spend it.
If my child got into a huge financial mess I would most certainly help them - but I would make darn sure that I did everything in my power to help them to change so it didn't happen again. Otherwise it would just keep happening over and over.
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Oh my goodness...you had me all the way to the end! Can anyone say "gullible!" :D
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Off to read your blog.....
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I mean really, this is so high school flashback. Not just this post, but so many lately on the general board.
We all have our own values, beliefs, and priorities. Can't we all just get along and try opening our hearts and minds in attempt to understand each other and possibly learn from each other?
No one is trying to change anyone or needs to defend why they feel the way they do, state it and move on. Skip posts made by those who rub you the wrong way or topics that get your panties in a bunch. (This is not to the OP specifically, but those who have had a difficult time here lately.)
If the boards are a sense of frustration for you, take a board break. I personally think SWB has put up with a lot of crud trying to create a place where EVERYONE can come and support each other in their homeschooling journey. I'm thankful that these boards exist. We, as members should be able to handle ourselves in a mature fashion and not need "babysat". Allow SWB to focus on writing books, in which she so generously shares her wisdom and experience. ;)
It's times like these that I really miss the rep system. I think this is an outstanding post! Especially the part about taking a board break if posters are finding themselves frustrated here. Absence will make the heart grow fonder. ;)
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So glad no one was hurt!!
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Crissy.
My guess is risque undies.
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I'll play too...
Aubrey: I know that she just had a baby and she lives in TX. I believe she soft spoken and has a gentle spirit.
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We have a Capital One card w/a 4% interest rate BUT we completely stopped using it a few months ago and now pay cash for everything.
We are not ready to cut it up yet...but it is in a sealed envelope in my dresser and OUT of my wallet!
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Fun quiz. I missed #5 & #9 I knew there was an odd number of justices and waffled between 7 & 9
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DS almost 8 is the same way. He started with this a few months ago. I say "please be careful not to spill your milk" and he says "spill my milk?" while acting like he's going to knock it over......all while laughing hysterically. Not in a disrespectful way, but just in a silly boy way. He does this with almost everything lately.
This is my son as well. I try not to stop it completely, but *try* to be patient. But it drives my dd's up the wall sometimes! They have *no* patience at all with his silliness.
He'll do something or say something silly and I'll just give him "the look" that says enough is enough and he'll smile and say "ok" and try to focus again on what he's supposed to be doing. But it's not long before he's at it again. :glare:
Life would be so dull without a boy! :)
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Yep, that's me and my three kiddos!
momof7 - thanks for the laugh! Sometimes *I* feel like the madhatter as well!
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I read this a little while ago on Dave Ramsey's site...throwing it out here for your consideration (it's long):
Remember Enron, WorldCom, Adelphia, and other companies had artificially put assets on the books? They'd say something was worth $10M when they bought it, but eventually it decreased in value, and they never updated the value in the books. That was part of the fraud. Under current laws at that time, they were all convicted and put in jail for fraud.
Then we got all mad and made all these new laws that are coming out the wazoo called Sarbanes-Oxley. It's a huge, massive law but the idea is that we were going to mandate ethics to corporate America because apparently they didn't have any, according to the Enron failure. It's now a total pain in the butt to execute it in a publicly traded company.It didn't work because you can't cause ethics to happen. However, it does make each company each day restate what their assets are worth if sold on the market. This accounting procedure is mark to market accounting--you need to remember that. It's a good concept and keeps companies from having loaded balance sheets.
How This Affects Us Today
However, it's part of what's caused this in the news now. Merrill Lynch was sitting with $30 billion tied up in sub-prime loans with houses. Stupid! They get what they deserve for doing that, and I'm with you on that. Those houses didn't become worthless all of a sudden because those people couldn't sell their bonds. Since they couldn't sell them, they basically gave them away for 22 cents on the dollar. Now do you think all those houses lost 80% of their value underneath that deal? No, they didn't, so they gave them away for 22 cents on the dollar (about $6 billion total) because there was no market for them. Nobody wants to buy sub-prime bonds because they suck. They're junk bonds. But at 22 cents on the dollar, it's a bargain because even if you foreclosed on every one of the houses in there, you'd probably get $20 billion back out of $30 billion, and so the company that bought those for $6 billion got a deal! But there's no market for them. That's where these companies are stuck. They can't sell this stuff, but accounting-wise, they've had to mark it down to market and it's frozen the marketplace.
Economist Wesbury is saying that if we change that one rule and don't force them to mark down to market value and just let them hold on to all the stuff, and say just on sub-primes for this period of time you can change that rule -- a temporary change -- that'll free the market up. It's seized right now; it's frozen. This will thaw it out and get it going again. He says that'll solve 60% of the problem ... and I think he's right.
That one accounting rule is what made Merrill Lynch sell out. That one accounting rule is what's driving other ones into the dirt. Would you rather let them change their accounting rule or loan them $700 billion for us to buyout their bad paper?
I'd rather them work their own crap out than have us bail them out with $700 billion of our tax dollars.
I don't like giving them any money or any help with my tax dollars. But I'd rather see that than see the whole thing turn completely upside down in a fruit basket turnover than have a whole meltdown or something and freak out here in the middle of the election season. Why don't we just take the FHA insurance program and extend it across these sub-primes? What that means is that you and I are guaranteeing the lender that they're not going to lose as much or any money on those mortgages. Now I don't like guaranteeing them, but I like it better than buying them. In other words, instead of $700 billion in tax-payer debt going out there to bail out these companies, just extend the insurance out. You could probably do that for less than $40 billion. It's like a 95% savings!
If the government insured those mortgages, they would then be marketable. And could sell them. And the companies would stay afloat. And we, the people, don't have to get into the mortgage business. Now we're going to get in there a little bit because of the insurance on those getting foreclosed on. But foreclosures aren't causing this. This is being caused because these companies are frozen and seized up. We've got to let some of the steam come off and put some oil in there to get this thing moving again. We can do that without going into debt $700 billion.
Here's Your Plan
Call your Congressman. Call your Senator. Tell them to change the mark-to-market accounting law and to extend insurance but extend no loans. If they extend loans - if they borrow the money on the national debt in order for us to all go into the mortgage business a trillion dollars - you're going to fire their butts and send them home.
I've talked with several people today, and it's on the tables in Washington, but it's not something you're going to see on TV. If you'll let your Congressmen know you know about this and that you'll vote against them if they don't vote to change the mark-to-market law and you'll contribute your money to make sure they never serve in office again. That's what you need to tell them early and often.
If you're pissed, this is the time to step up and do something about it, America! You can stop this! It's being railroaded down your throat, but you can stop them if you call them in mass starting now. READY ... SET ... GO!
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