Remudamom Posted January 5, 2009 Share Posted January 5, 2009 I just put up a new ad on my sale site. As usual, would someone read it for me, check for obvious mistakes, suggest anything. It's the very first entry. There isn't a lot of info on these fillies because I have not worked with them a lot. Thanks. http://www.xanga.com/remuda2007 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ellie Posted January 5, 2009 Share Posted January 5, 2009 Ok, here: You have a bunch of extra spaces: after "2007," and after all of the periods in both paragraphs. They make big, visual holes that people's eyes will get stuck on. Use single spaces. Also, you could do "JK Rumor" in bold, and do a shift-return after that line, so there's no space between it and the following paragraph. Right now "JK Rumor" is just sort of floating in space, not clearly connected to the description. I don't see any spelling or grammar errors. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Remudamom Posted January 5, 2009 Author Share Posted January 5, 2009 Okay, I'll go back and mess with it. Sometimes things look different on the real page and the edit page. Thanks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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