Prairie~Phlox Posted January 21, 2014 Share Posted January 21, 2014 It's been a while since I've even looked at a resume, but this is just brainstorming. Not sure if there's too much on it? Any suggestions? Right now it all fits on one page. AThat's my name1234 C Drive, Mytown, IN 41245123-334-7856 (cell)myemail@comcast.net EDUCATION Home School High School, Mytown, INHigh School Graduation anticipated in May 2016 Planning to study nursing as a major in college WORK EXPERIENCE Child Care April 2011-current Provide child care for several families after school, weekends and during school vacations Blank Christian Daycare April 2013-August 2013 Oversaw 2-5 year olds, afterschool children, responsible for greeting parents and cleaningCulinary Catering 2011-current Help prep and serve food and beverages at catered events VOLUNTEER WORK Our County Library, Summer Reading Program Volunteer, 2010-2012 Blank Christian Daycare, Shopping Assistant, 2009-2012 SKILLS Enjoy working with children Reading, writing, and drawing Hard worker, honest, and reliable Proficient with Microsoft Word and the Internet ACTIVITIES Member of Blank Christian Church Drama Troupe, 2012-current 4-H Member, 2007-current Red Cross Babysitter Training, April 2011 REFERENCES Elizab S 123-456-2161 D Smit 123-456-2952 Bill Bold, Pastor 123-456-4083 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest submarines Posted January 21, 2014 Share Posted January 21, 2014 I'd combine Education with Training (baby sitter training). The Skills section is very mish-mashy. "Hard worker" is not a skill. I don't think "Honest" should ever be on a resume. "Reading, writing and drawing" are not skills that should be on the resume either. They should go under "Interests." The only actual skill listed is the Microsoft Office / Interent. Other random thoughts: Anticipated graduation date should be combined with the first line. "Planning to study..." is better phrased as "College goal: nursing"--shorter and more active. Skills should be more precise and detailed. I'm sure she has more than what you listed! Depending on what she comes up under "skills" I'd put the Skills section earlier on the resume--either first, or second. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prairie~Phlox Posted January 21, 2014 Author Share Posted January 21, 2014 I'd combine Education with Training (baby sitter training). The Skills section is very mish-mashy. "Hard worker" is not a skill. I don't think "Honest" should ever be on a resume. "Reading, writing and drawing" are not skills that should be on the resume either. They should go under "Interests." The only actual skill listed is the Microsoft Office / Interent. Other random thoughts: Anticipated graduation date should be combined with the first line. "Planning to study..." is better phrased as "College goal: nursing"--shorter and more active. Skills should be more precise and detailed. I'm sure she has more than what you listed! Depending on what she comes up under "skills" I'd put the Skills section earlier on the resume--either first, or second. Thanks, we were taking some ideas from online. I may just have her take out the SKILLS and change it to INTERESTS. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hjffkj Posted January 21, 2014 Share Posted January 21, 2014 what is the job she's applying for? take out volunteer work and add those thing listed to work experience. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hjffkj Posted January 21, 2014 Share Posted January 21, 2014 i would even take out red cross babysitting... as an activity and in child care work section have bulleted point saying red cross certified in whatever it is she was certified. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prairie~Phlox Posted January 21, 2014 Author Share Posted January 21, 2014 She's applying at a church that does summer programs. The church she worked at before closed it's daycare. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prairie~Phlox Posted January 21, 2014 Author Share Posted January 21, 2014 These are the changes I've made for her: EDUCATION Home School High School, Mytown, IN, graduation anticipated in May 2016 College goal: nursing WORK EXPERIENCE Child Care April 2011-current Red Cross Babysitter Training Certification, April 2011 Provide child care for several families after school, weekends and during school vacations Blank Christian Daycare April 2013-August 2013 Oversaw 2-5 year olds, afterschool children, responsible for greeting parents and cleaningCulinary Catering2011-current Help prep and serve food and beverages at catered eventsBlank County Public Library, Summer Reading Program, Volunteer May-August: 2010-2012 Assisted patrons signing up for the Summer Reading ProgramBlank Christian Daycare, Shopping Assistant, Volunteer 2009-2012 Assisted with weekly shopping, unloading and putting away of groceries for the daycareACTIVITIES Member of Blank Christian Church Drama Troupe, 2012-current 4-H Member, 2007-current I still left the references as well. Should we take out "in" and do graduation anticipated: May 2016 I really don't think this guy is expecting a whole lot, but I don't want it to look like she's not trying at all. Thanks. Any other word changes? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MolleenCarie Posted January 21, 2014 Share Posted January 21, 2014 FYI You have your county name in the new post. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bolt. Posted January 21, 2014 Share Posted January 21, 2014 Changes suggested: Possibly: Homeschool High School -to- "High School 'Junior' (or 'Grade xx' -- whatever is normal), Name of Town" {Sorry, but this somewhat disguises the homeschooling angle, making her seem more 'normal' as an applicant. Unless being 'the homeschooled one' is going to be a really positive thing, it's probably best viewed as a potential negative to 'some people'.} Capital G on 'graduation anticipated' --and, yes, take out the 'in'. Call the section "Work and Volunteer Experience" Work Expearience. Put the two 'until present' ones together, it's more logical, as well as seeming like she has two different strong skills, rather than reading like 'all kids, oh, plus cooking'. Change the detail on the daycare entry to be less specific. Those details make the job seem small/narrow, which it probably was, in which case vaguer is better. (The same with the summer reading program details and thr daycare volunteering details. Vaugeness might give the impression of greater levels of responsibility.) Consider calling the 'activities' "community involvement" instead. Leave a blank line separating each if the 3 'activities'. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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