Just sharing a new poem my 10 year old DS wrote

[Nestof3]

Everything silent,

except for the wind whistling through the trees,

already half bare leaves of gold and brown and red,

dead leaves crunch underfoot,

clumps of jewelweed and poison ivy swish against shoes of dried leaves and bare feet,

the nickering of horses,

a blur and a magnificent white heart bursts through a tangle of dead leaves,

leaping over a fallen elm log half wood, half termites,

seven elves follow,

dressed in dried leaves and seeds and armed with large bows and spears,

five arrows fly

instantly embedding themselves in a young hazel.

[Jean in Newcastle]

I can see a very vivid picture reading that poem.

[Natalieclare]

I can see a very vivid picture reading that poem.

 

Me, too. :001_smile:

[Caitilin]

Excellent imagery. I also really like the ending sound--hazel is a lovely word. Your ds has a good ear for a turn of phrase.

[oldskool]

That is amazing and beautiful.

[AlaskaGrownFamily]

:)

[NanceXToo]

That's very good! He should submit it somewhere. My daughter had a few poems published in Secular Homeschooling Magazine and was ecstatic to get her $5.00 check and to see her poem in print!