I saw some very helpful things in the comments on the most recent sample posted and I would like some feedback and perspective on my DD's work.
Background: Last year as part of her BW writing assignments, she completed an analysis of a Van Gogh painting based on some questions that were given to her as prompts. She thoroughly enjoyed it and has asked to do more of the same. I had not managed to get this together and so she took the initiative, found a painting and wrote a short paragraph about it.
Further background: DD has always had good writing skills - her mechanics are solid, and I feel like she has a good natural voice. But as her mother, I sometimes have trouble analyzing things objectively.
When I read this, I had two thoughts. 1. Well, I can send her off to university now. I honestly felt that the writing and analysis was of equal or better quality than the writing of many university essays I read when I was marking 2nd and 3rd year classes 20 years ago. 2. She must have plagiarized parts of this (I asked her if she got her ideas from anywhere and she said they were all hers - I even did a quick google search and found nothing and then felt really bad for not trusting her).
So, I'm asking if anyone can give me any feedback as to whether or not this is merely good but could use improvement (and in what areas) or more on the exceptional end of things. Again, I've lost all my objectivity with regards to her and her Language arts/art projects.
Here's her essay and this is the painting that inspired it: Storm In The Mountains by Albert Bierstadt:
As the title reveals, this painting is a storm in the mountains. But what lies beneath, waiting to be seen? Study the painting. What do you see? What sticks out more now than before? Perhaps the little house, vulnerable and small. Or the trees, blowing in the intense, billowing winds.