I have to write a 1 paragraph summary of a new student club for my Technical Writing course which I'm taking at a university. For privacy, I have removed the name of my school and professor.
Throughout this semester I have lost many points for misuse of commas and apostrophes, pronoun agreement and use of the passive voice.
I especially need help rewarding that really long and awkward and bulky part that is underlined.
Dear. Dr. ___________,
The student organization that my group mates and I are proposing is called The Professional Developers Society. The organization that we are proposing is a way to help students of computer science, and any other discipline, who feel that their major is not sufficiently preparing them for entry into the professional realm of their chosen field. The mission of The Professional Developers Society is to help students develop the interviewing skills and professional manners they need to be successful during the interviewing process. In addition to interviewing skills and professional manners, the Professional Developers Society aims to provide community and camaraderie to any students interested in creating personal projects in the hopes of developing a professional portfolio during their academic career. The Professional Developers Society will be a valuable addition to the students of CIS because the fact that there is neither departmental guidance nor support for the development of a student portfolio at SCHOOL, the average GPA of a SCHOOL student is below the 3.0 required by many companies for internships and job interviews and the absence of professional development as a required course for CIS majors, many SCHOOL graduates are at a disadvantage as they seek entry into the professional world. The Professional Developers Society would provide CIS students with both an outlet and opportunities to use their skills and develop their talents with no grades attached.