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Assignment: Choose one character trait you think Franklin possessed. Write a paper demonstrating he possessed this trait through evidence from his autobiography.
Ben Franklin ~ The Picture of Industry
Benjamin Franklin is one of the most famous people to walk the earth. Some of us know Franklin as an inventor, others as a political leader, and yet more of us think of him as a writer. He played one of the largest roles in British and American history and his impact was so massive, that his face is on currency, statues, and even television, over 250 years later. This all begs the question, how does one man engrain himself into culture so firmly, that he is talked about daily, hundreds of years later?
In his autobiography, Benjamin Franklin mentioned thirteen of the important attributes found in both general society and Christianity. He resolved on a weekly basis to go an entire seven day period without failing to show a given attribute. When he mastered one, he moved on to the next until in theory, he had mastered all thirteen. Benjamin continued this until he had completed four cycles in one year. The thirteen attributes are as follows: temperance, silence, order, resolution, frugality, industry, sincerity, justice, moderation, cleanliness, tranquility, charity, and humility. Many of these attributes align with the fruits of the spirit which are mentioned in the Bible, which would explain why Franklin held them to such a high regard. But, what made Franklin so famous was not his morality as a whole, it was his industrious personality. Benjamin was never at rest, and was never satisfied with his current position. Instead of studying himself into a corner, like most apprentices, tradesmen and even scholars of his time, he broadened his education in all fields, from science to religion to politics. This broadening allowed him to increase his influence in society.
Franklin was a politician, inventor, writer, editor, and friend of many. He changed the life of the millions of people who have experienced the worldwide change that occurred with the birth of the United States. He catapulted the world into a new age of democracy and creativity. The United States flourished and grew into a world leader, and none of it would have happened without the industrious Benjamin Franklin.