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#1 pooh bear

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Posted 15 August 2014 - 01:16 PM

My ds, 14, wrote this short little story and would like someone other than his parents to read it. Would you mind reading and telling us what you think?

 

It is based on an event that happened in a video game called Final Fantasy VII.

 

A Retelling of the Nibelheim Incident

 



#2 Jean in Newcastle

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Posted 15 August 2014 - 01:57 PM

It sounds like a fun video game.  I can tell that your son likes to write.  Keep it up!



#3 pooh bear

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Posted 15 August 2014 - 02:24 PM

It sounds like a fun video game.  I can tell that your son likes to write.  Keep it up!

 

My Ds sends his thanks.

 

Over the past few months he's found that he likes to write and wants to write more often. He's looking into taking part in NaNoWriMo this year.



#4 Robin M

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Posted 11 October 2014 - 01:23 PM

Hi I just happened to stumble across this today and had to comment.  What a great story.  He did a great show of showing the story and very well with the dialogue.  The conflict kept rising with Cloud being so self centered that he couldn't or wouldn't pay attention to anything else.  Good job with the characters and different responses.  Bravo!   He definitely should do nanowrimo. Keep encouraging him to write.  My son loves to write fan fiction as well.