Success!!! I finally got a fairly decent paper out of DS!
Now the problem is that I have no idea how to grade it! Help me critique it please? I know it has some grammatical and punctuation errors. I want to be able to comment on how to correct it without editing it for him but without sounding harsh and critical.
Code Talker Response Paper
Code Talker tells the tale of Kii Yazhi, a Navajo who had been taken from home to go to “white man’s school”, as Joseph Bruchac, states it. As a letter to his grandchildren, he writes about what he had to go through, and what he had to endure through his life time, all the hardships, and all the pain.
Set in World War II, was a time where the motive of white people didn’t coincide with the tribe of Navajos. Through the turmoil, and the struggle, the value of what Bruchac writes isn’t immediately found in the event taken place in the story. The true value is that we are only part of a whole, especially if you are in the military.
Bruchac starts the book, telling his grandchildren how he was sent to boarding school, having to cut his hair, which was traditionally unfit; having his beautiful and homemade clothing and jewelry, which were never to be seen again. Kii Yazhi was given a new name, at this school, and soon became known as Ned Begay.
While in the school, the author tells us that, the whites would abuse Ned and other Navajos that wouldn’t speak English, as they hated the language. They feared being overthrown by them, and so when they would speak their native language, they would have to have a bar of soap put in their mouth, if that did not work, they would be beaten, and if that didn’t work they would be chained in a dark, cold, and damp basement with little to no food, or water.
Kii Yazhi, now known as Ned Begay, starts striving to know as much as he can about anything, and everything. He learns a lot about the Japanese, and how they “wanted to control the world, and Europe.” While at school one day, the Japanese launches a surprise attack, while listening to it on the radio, he soon decides he wants to join the Marines to help fight.
Due to his young age, Ned couldn’t join the Marines, but he soon though about lying about his age, which was a common thing, but his parents would let him. After turning 17, he finally gets his parents blessing to join the marines, and he makes it through boot camp, into the code school, and learned the “code.”
He soon gets shipped out to various locations, seeing all kinds of “new lands,” and new places. He gets shot in the arm, while fighting in Guam. He learns all kinds of new things, and so have I. Through Ned’s story, written by Bruchac, I learned about places and things I never thought I would ever hear of, nonetheless think about!
All in all, this story opened my eyes to the brutalities that happened to a set of people, who were not well known, yet proved to be very useful, in a war situation. Kii Yazhi, may not be real, but this story tells the tale of what did happen back in World War II, with the Code Talkers, who weren’t allowed to send letters, or even talk to their families until years AFTER the war!