steppingstonemomma Posted November 13, 2012 Share Posted November 13, 2012 We recently started using LAOW with my newly turned 15yo daughter. Her assignment for chapter 3 (altered from the drag-racing prompt) was to write an essay using the full thesis points that she listed during the prewriting stage. I have always used IEW (through SICC B)and have had a checklist to grade her writing but now I feel so unsure of how to grade this piece of writing! Any help and comments would be GREATLY appreciated. I will pass them on to her and I will learn from them too! This is not my area of expertise! Thank you so much! Tiffany Facebook The average teen has approximately 201 Facebook friends and the overall person as about 359 friends. What does that say about our commonly used social networking tool? It says that Facebook is a very popular piece of equipment. It is very popular with both teenagers and adults. Facebook gives ample opportunity to witness or encourage people. If you can look past some of the downfalls of Facebook like tearing down people or revealing too much information you will realize that Facebook has become a positive addition to our culture. There are some negatives to Facebook. For teenagers especially, it is important for them to be mature enough to surf through any inappropriate content or foolish talk. Unfortunately however the majority of people on Facebook are not mature enough to post good content for children who are reading it or will read inappropriate things themselves. Many people on Facebook, even adults will complain or tear down other people in a post that other people read. Another problem with Facebook is that many kids tell too much about themselves by giving out very public information for the whole world to see. For example on Facebook you can tell where you live and where you are at that moment. With all the friends that people friend on Facebook, their news feed is normally very long, making spending time on Facebook a time sucking machine. Some people spend hours of staring at the computer reading the numerous posts. Despite the negatives to Facebook, it can provide a perfect ministry opportunity. For example, you could encourage someone if they are having a rough week. You could also let them know you are praying for them. People post everything on Facebook from what they are doing at that moment to what they are doing in a couple days! So people would have plenty of opportunity to gather new prayer requests from people. For teenagers it gives them an opportunity to have a relationship with more mature and wise adults. In the bible it says “He who walks with the wise grows wise, but a companion of fools suffers harm.†Proverbs 13:20. If teens friend older, mature adults, through Facebook, who post wisdom, than teens will begin to think more maturely, which, will affect their life style more than they could ever realize. People, teens especially, will get really lonely and left out when they are out of the loop. Since almost everyone is on Facebook, people who aren’t don’t see pictures from family far away or will miss announcements that are posted. When that lonely person gets Facebook they understand what is going on, in the world around them. Facebook is a great advertising tool for special events. For example a concert is being hosted by a young teenage girl, who is not well known, Facebook helped her gather people outside her circle of friends. On Facebook there are certain pages that can unite people to certain interests, which will connect people with that same interest. Facebook is a good social networking tool to connect and advertise with. It is very important for people feel in the loop with friends and family that they don’t see very often. And teenagers will be able to grow wise when being mentored through Facebook by wise Christian adults. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jean in Newcastle Posted November 13, 2012 Share Posted November 13, 2012 Facebook The average teen has approximately 201 Facebook friends and the overall person Do you mean adult? has about 359 friends. What does that say about our commonly used social networking tool? It says that Facebook is a very popular piece of equipment. It is very popular with both teenagers and adults. Facebook gives ample opportunity to witness or encourage people. This sentence doesn't belong here, I don't think. If you can look past some of the downfalls of Facebook like tearing down people or revealing too much information you will realize that Facebook has become a positive addition to our culture. Here you can put your sentence about witnessing and encouragement. There are some negatives to Facebook. For teenagers especially, it is important for them to be mature enough to surf through any inappropriate content or foolish talk. Unfortunately however the majority of people on Facebook are not mature enough to post good content for children who are reading it or will read inappropriate things themselves. Many people on Facebook, even adults will complain or tear down other people in a post that other people read. Another problem with Facebook is that many kids tell too much about themselves by giving out very public information for the whole world to see. For example on Facebook you can tell where you live and where you are at that moment. With all the friends that people friend on Facebook, their news feed is normally very long, making spending time on Facebook a time sucking machine. Some people spend hours of staring at the computer reading the numerous posts. Despite the negatives to Facebook, it can provide a perfect ministry opportunity. For example, you could encourage someone if they are having a rough week. You could also let them know you are praying for them. People post everything on Facebook from what they are doing at that moment to what they are doing in a couple days! So people would have plenty of opportunity to gather new prayer requests from people. For teenagers it gives them an opportunity to have a relationship with more mature and wise adults. In the bible it says “He who walks with the wise grows wise, but a companion of fools suffers harm.†Proverbs 13:20. If teens friend older, mature adults, comma not necessary through Facebook, who post wisdom, than thenteens will begin to think more maturely, which, will affect their life style more than they could ever realize. This paragraph was about ministry opportunities. You should start a new paragraph here since you are talking about other positives not connected with ministry. People, teens especially, will get really lonely and left out when they are out of the loop. Since almost everyone is on Facebook, people who aren’t don’t see pictures from family far away or will miss announcements that are posted. When that lonely person gets Facebook they understand what is going on, in the world around them. Facebook is a great advertising tool for special events. For example a concert is being hosted by a young teenage girl, who is not well known, Facebook helped her gather people outside her circle of friends. On Facebook there are certain pages that can unite people to certain interests, which will connect people with that same interest. Facebook is a good social networking tool to connect and advertise with. Is this your concluding paragraph? You need something stronger. I thought you were continuing to tell me more positive things and didn't get that it was a conclusion. Perhaps something like "Despite the pitfalls, Facebook is a popular and positive additon to our culture " This brings it back to what you said in the first paragraph.It is very important for people feel in the loop with friends and family that they don’t see very often. And teenagers will be able to grow wise when being mentored through Facebook by wise Christian adults. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
steppingstonemomma Posted November 20, 2012 Author Share Posted November 20, 2012 Thanks! She worked on changing some things you mentioned and also two of her aunts mentioned... Here's her final product..Not perfect, but an improvement. .Cool thing is that we read through everyone's comments and then she made all the changes! I didn't have to hold her hand! WOOHOOO! Facebook The average teen has approximately 201 Facebook friends and the average person as about 359 friends. What does that say about our commonly used social networking tool? It says that Facebook is a very popular piece of technology which is very popular with both teenagers and adults. If you can look past some of the downfalls of Facebook, you will realize that Facebook has become a positive addition to our teenage culture. There are some negatives to Facebook. For teenagers especially, it is important for them to be mature enough to surf through any inappropriate content or foolish talk. Unfortunately, however, the majority of people on Facebook are not mature enough to post good content for children who are reading it or they will read inappropriate things themselves. Many people on Facebook, even adults, will complain or tear down other people in a post that their friends will read. Additionally, many kids tell too much about themselves by giving out very public information for the whole world to see. For example on Facebook you can tell where you live and where you are at that moment. This is a serious safety concern. Furthermore, with all the friends that people friend on Facebook, their news feed is normally very long, making spending time on Facebook a time sucking machine. Some people spend hours staring at the computer reading the numerous posts. This makes our teen culture unproductive. Despite the negatives to Facebook, it can provide a perfect ministry opportunity for youth. For example, a teenager could encourage someone if they are having a rough week and could also let them know they are praying for them. People post everything on Facebook, from what they are doing at that moment, to what they are doing in a couple days even a year from now! So people would have plenty of opportunity to gather new prayer requests from people. Also, for teenagers, it gives them an opportunity to have a relationship with more mature and wise adults. In the Bible it says “He who walks with the wise grows wise, but a companion of fools suffers harm.†(Proverbs 13:20). Amanda is a great example of a teenager who changed spiritually and mentally when she friended all the older, wise ladies in her church. Amanda seemed like a good Christian who wouldn’t miss church and gave great answers in Sunday school. When she would communicate with these ladies she realized her faith wasn’t quite real. These ladies became her mentors who gave her good advice when she needed it. Amanda grew spiritually and had a great relationship with theses older ladies in her church. If teens “friend†older, more mature adults, who post wisdom, then teens will begin to think more maturely, which will affect their lifestyle more then they could ever realize. People often get lonely and feel left out when they are distant from their loved ones. Since almost everyone is on Facebook, the few people who aren’t don’t get see pictures from family far away or will miss announcements that are posted. Recently Brianna graduated and headed across the country to collage. Having Facebook allowed her to keep in touch with family and childhood friends keeping her from feeling too homesick. One of Facebook’s strengths is its ability for people to network. Recently a concert was hosted by a young teenage girl. Facebook was a great tool which helped her to contact people quickly and build excitement. In addition there are many pages with a specific content which can unite people with the same interests. Communication among young people has definitely been enhanced because of Facebook. In the end, Facebook has impacted teenage culture for the better. It has given young people great ministry opportunities, the ability to grow and mature, cure loneliness, and network with others. In the future hopefully there will be even more benefits to be realized. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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