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8 yo's narration: please critique.


Halcyon
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Writing is one area where I feel I don't have a good grasp of my son's ability or level. Can you please read these narrations and tell me what you think?

 

Thank you.

 

This is based on a reading from Trumpet of the Swan.

Mr. Beaver and Sam liked to go to a cabin in Canada. Sam's favorite things about the cabin were the quiet, the lack of school and no homework. Sam asked his dad if they wouldd be returning in thirty-five days because that's when the eggs would hatch.

 

This is based on a chapter from SOTW3:

Tobacco made the English settlers rich. Tobacco was very hard to make and very popular, so European traders brought slaves from Africa to work on the farms. The settlers had thousands of slaves who had no chance of returning home....ever!!!!

 

Another narration from SOTW3:

The English and the French were settling in the New World, and the Dutch wanted some land. They wanted to build a settelment (sp) on Manhattan Island, but to do that, they had to buy the land from the Lenape. Peter Stuyvesant helped organize the new colony, but the English came and renamed it New York. This was the end of the Dutch settelment (sp) in this part of North America.

 

Finally, a narration from a book on eagles:

Eagles can see for more than half a mile. Unlike owls, eagles sleep at night and hunt in the day. Eagles have four toes. Each eagle's talons are different becase (sp) each eagle catches different prey.

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I'm learning right along with you so take what I say in that light but I think those narrations are great. He wrote those on his own and the only spelling mistakes were the ones marked with (sp)?

 

 

Thank you. Yes, the only errors were the ones with a (sp) marking. I do think he needs to go a bit deeper; I am thinking the 3 sentence limit/suggestion that SWB has might need to be increased, especially when I read longer passages (we're not using the workbook but just the textbook). I also want to see him use more complex sentence structures, but I'm not sure that's an age-appropriate expectation.

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I think they are good. Those look very similar to what my 8 yo is writing. He does write some that are longer, as much as a page or a little more. But when he does this he still doesn't separate into logical paragraphs, so I've got to give some more instruction on that before I encourage him in the longer narrations.

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I think your 8 yo is doing well. His narrations are just what I would expect a this age; he's writing in complete sentences, including appropriate details, generally proficient in his use of grammar, punctuation and spelling.

 

You're doing just fine with him :001_smile:

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