Level 2 History outline & rewrite, 12yob, Work in Progress

[Guest Dulcimeramy]

Outline (from World War I by Zachary Kent) *this student's first level 2 outline

 

1. The year 1916 was full of defeats for Russia.

a. On June 4, 1916, Aleksey Brusilov ordered an attack on a German position and one million Russian soldiers were killed.

 

2. After their losses on the Austro-Hungarian front, the Russians took peasants from their farms to turn them into soldiers.

a. Russian soldiers started saying, "Bread and peace!"

 

3. In 1917, food riots broke out in Petrograd and 200 people were killed.

a. Mikhail Rodzianko wired the Czar, saying, "Anarchy reigns."

 

4. Czar Nicholas II couldn't do anything about the state of his country, so on March 26 he abdicated.

a. Russians grabbed for control of the country and set up a 'soviet.'

 

5. Nikolai Lenin, an exile from Switzerland, wanted to set up a socialist government in Russia.

a. Zudendorf, who wanted Russia weak, let Lenin pass through Germany.

 

6. Lenin was treated like a hero. He preached against war and brought himself into power.

a. The Russians stopped acknowledging the provincial government after Lenin came to power.

Edited February 20, 2011 by Dulcimeramy

[Guest Dulcimeramy]

Rewrite from outline, unedited

 

The year 1916 was full of crushing defeats for Russia. On June 4, for example, Aleksey Brusiolov ordered an attack on a German position on the Austro-Hungarian front. In that campaign alone, one million Russian soldiers were killed.

 

After their losses on the June campaign, the Russian army dragged peasants off their farms for more soldiers. With no one growing food, the country starved. Angry Russian soldiers started chanting, "Bread and peace!" Food riots broke out in Petrograd, and 200 demonstrators were killed.

 

The Czar, Nicholas II, seemed helpless in his palace. The Russians no longer obeyed authority. His advisors said he should abdicate, and abdicate he did, on March 26, 1917. Russians got control of the government as the Czar dropped it, and set up a provisional government called a soviet.

 

Nikolai Lenin heard about the revolution, and travelled from Zurich, Switzerland, to take advantage of the turmoil. Ludendorf, head general of the German army, let Lenin pass through Germany on a special train; Ludendorf know that Lenin's presence would weaken Russia.

 

Lenin was treated like a hero on his arrival, and parades were held in his honor. He preached piously against war, and told the people of Russia what they wanted to hear. Soon after Lenin's arrival the Russians stopped acknowledging the provisional government.

[Learner]

Wow!! Is this really 2nd grader's writing...my ds is nowhere close to this, and he is in ps!

[Guest Dulcimeramy]

Wow!! Is this really 2nd grader's writing...my ds is nowhere close to this, and he is in ps!

 

No, it is a 12 year old's writing! "Level 2" is the degree of detail required in the outline.

 

Level 1 means to find only the main idea of each paragraph.

 

Level 2 means to find the main idea AND the most important fact supporting the main idea in each paragraph.

 

Level 3 means finding those pieces of info plus additional details.

[Guest Dulcimeramy]

This is my 6 year old's writing (Charlotte Mason-style narration):

 

Captain John Smith was going to be killed. His hands were still tied behind his back. There were wooden clubs and flat stones over him. The girl with the beads moved toward Pocahontas. Powhatan was sitting high on a throne. The council house was filled with light.

[Pata]

I really like the rewrite he did from his outline. He included all the outline detail, but made it interesting so that it didn't seem like just a list of facts. Great job, especially for his first time!

[Guest Dulcimeramy]

I really like the rewrite he did from his outline. He included all the outline detail, but made it interesting so that it didn't seem like just a list of facts. Great job, especially for his first time!

 

Thank you very much! :)

[Capt_Uhura]

:iagree: with Pata!!! Well done!